TOEFL TWE, writing exercise

I
could not agree the statement that the change in food getting easier
prepared makes the way people live better. This is because the
following two reasons, happiness and health of people.

First,
eating means not only provide nutrition to one’s body but also make
the one happier. It is the fact that human could not be alive without
feeding. However, what makes human more special is that human want to
find happiness from all time in their life even in the time to
preparing food. If cooking were just feeding nutrition, human might
be just a type of animals. Moreover, food can be more delicious and
more beautiful if the cook to make it his or her own energy and
skill. It should take probably long time but it will be hopefully
delicious.

Second,
fast food may have probable hazards. From a study, it is revealed
that too high temperature of frying oil gets the oil ruined. If the
cook try to make food in short time, he or she should maintain the
temperature higher than the safe temparature. This is just a example.
There are so many examples which implies that fastly cooked food may
have much hazardaous matters. That is why I do not like to eat fast
food. Fast food is good for your tongue, much bad for your body.

I
argue that easily prepared food could not help people life more
improved with the reasons that I mentioned above. Even though I have
not so much time to eat, I prefer to slowly prepare food which I eat
than kinds of fast food.